tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post3862569978709109353..comments2023-11-05T01:33:56.300-08:00Comments on The Well Fed Muse: High Desert Scholarship Contest/Writing Prompt 10/07/10Writing Padhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comBlogger63125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-9508969707815604002020-08-12T09:41:11.494-07:002020-08-12T09:41:11.494-07:00Very inspiring post. It's an inspiration for m...Very inspiring post. It's an inspiration for me. Great tips that i was looking for<br />here are some more foods,lifestyle and fun<br /><a href="https://blogstoread.in" rel="nofollow"> posts you need to check out </a><br /><a href="https://blogforpassion.tk" rel="nofollow">great tips for blogging are here</a><br />Zafreen Khanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18195593206856328545noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-9127694067899533472010-11-27T13:15:07.224-08:002010-11-27T13:15:07.224-08:00Elizabeth,
I really enjoyed your piece! I love t...Elizabeth,<br /><br />I really enjoyed your piece! I love the Serbian boss and her "European bluntness." I love the fidgeting with the Starbucks coffee cup and wondering if it was appropriate to put it on the boss's desk. I love the neon pink, green, and orange flashcards. I love that the narrator comes across a blog and writes, "FINALLY." How wonderful!<br /><br />Thanks for posting!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-19441087026448675662010-11-27T13:07:41.843-08:002010-11-27T13:07:41.843-08:00Dear Victoria,
Wow! This story is a total jaw dr...Dear Victoria,<br /><br />Wow! This story is a total jaw dropper. I love that it is from the perspective of the 11 year old. I love the description of his soccer/Saturday routine, that "except for those few weeks when he is eating leftover turkey from Thursday’s feast, or dying eggs for tomorrows hunt, every Saturday is the same. There is sign up day, getting your equipment day, picture day and of course the big tournament day, and finally award day." I love that he normally stops for pizza and ice cream and that now he won't because his father blew his head off and the reasons why the father killed himself. <br /><br />Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-1040479809747464612010-11-27T12:54:37.085-08:002010-11-27T12:54:37.085-08:00Dear Soseh,
I love this piece! I love the descri...Dear Soseh,<br /><br />I love this piece! I love the description of Mari--her baby face, her helium voice, the fact that she cooks vegetables to drink the butter. I love the rag tag army of Siverlake hipsters and what they'd do. I also love Mari's various sharp pieces of advice like, "sell everything you own. Now. We can siphon gas from cars abandoned on the freeway."<br /><br />Nice job! Thanks for posting!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-41141536693115906522010-11-27T12:52:00.808-08:002010-11-27T12:52:00.808-08:00Dear Anonymous (Economy Hates Love Piece),
I love...Dear Anonymous (Economy Hates Love Piece),<br /><br />I love this piece! I love the first line, I love that the economy has forced him out of an advertising job and is destroying is first healthy relationship in years. I love the posh cubicle farm. I also love the description of the girlfriend (good Polish stock, a foodie), and that his economy was beginning to tarnish her vision of their life together. Powerful piece!<br /><br />Thanks for posting!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-87261723304407568642010-11-27T12:49:30.423-08:002010-11-27T12:49:30.423-08:00Dear Joanna,
This is a wonderful piece! I love t...Dear Joanna,<br /><br />This is a wonderful piece! I love the waxy moon face of the boss. I love all the specific reasons why the narrator was not the kind of person that got fired--she was a National Honors Society member and a play contest winner. I love the scene of the narrator crying, signing papers, and cleaning out her desk. I love that the narrator goes back to the boyfriend at the end and that she says that his apartment is "home."<br /><br />Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-3770338751456418952010-11-27T12:46:39.033-08:002010-11-27T12:46:39.033-08:00Dear Anonymous,
This is a very moving story. I l...Dear Anonymous,<br /><br />This is a very moving story. I love the repetition of "lose it all/losing it all." I love the series of questions that he asks himself about what would happen and what would it mean if he does lose it all. I love the fantasy of hiking into the forest and digging into the ground for new roots. I also love the details that kick this story off--that the wife, the family accountant, has skipped the mortgage payment to pay for a writing retreat. Wow!<br /><br />Nice job! Thanks for posting!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-71348367369616414212010-11-27T12:42:49.780-08:002010-11-27T12:42:49.780-08:00Dear DC,
This is a great story! I love "Inf...Dear DC,<br /><br />This is a great story! I love "Inflation! Joblessness! Foreclosure!" I love the shoebox full of money and what the narrator and godmother bought with the money--popovers with strawberry butter and warm consomme. I also love the phrase, "the Roaring Eighties!" <br /><br />Nice job! Thanks for posting!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-3278583714177886572010-11-27T12:40:15.542-08:002010-11-27T12:40:15.542-08:00Michael,
I loved your piece! I love that the nar...Michael,<br /><br />I loved your piece! I love that the narrator finds snot dribbling from his friend's nose sexy, how the snot comes back at the end. I love the lines, "I'd been exceptionally successful in raising jeans and sweatshirts. Not so much in raising Gina's salary." I love that the narrator feels responsible for the friend being laid off and that he is fantasizing about kissing her. It is a really moving story!<br /><br />Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-83968201511297960162010-11-27T12:35:03.964-08:002010-11-27T12:35:03.964-08:00Cherie,
I loved your piece. It was really moving...Cherie,<br /><br />I loved your piece. It was really moving. I love the description of the daughter wailing and her pitiful howls. That broke my heart. I love the scenes in the bathroom: the baby standing and the one grunting child and one clingy child. I love the game of "Daddy Monster" and that even though the job loss was devastating and scary that it gave the narrator's husband more time for self-exploration and family time. <br /><br />Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-1330580521082750932010-11-27T12:29:11.601-08:002010-11-27T12:29:11.601-08:00Dear Laura,
I really enjoyed your piece. I love ...Dear Laura,<br /><br />I really enjoyed your piece. I love the six dollar cup of coffee at LA Mill. I love the pieces of overheard dialogue: "fuckin’ Iraq, vato. Shit, ese. Nobody fucks with me, man.” I also love the description of the Marine haircut.<br /><br />Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-73221817235226938372010-11-27T12:21:17.003-08:002010-11-27T12:21:17.003-08:00Hi DC,
What a lovely poem. it is really sad and ...Hi DC,<br /><br />What a lovely poem. it is really sad and moving. I love learning the history of the husband! I love the look in the husband's eyes and how that comes back around again at the end. I love how he promised at age 18 (when he was young and full of promise) that he'd be the happiest man on earth, and I love the line, "But a man without a job is no good." <br /><br />Nice job! Thank you for posting!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-30545869548164382882010-11-27T12:17:06.055-08:002010-11-27T12:17:06.055-08:00Zoe,
I love this story. It's really powerful....Zoe,<br /><br />I love this story. It's really powerful. I feel like I can see the narrator's father pulling the dollar out of his wallet and burning the dollar. Your description of that scene is great. I also love that the narrator did a bunch of babysitting jobs to raise the money and the scene at the end when she recounts the story to her father, and he apologizes and gets teary! Wow!<br /><br />Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-66237611209536340162010-11-27T12:13:29.095-08:002010-11-27T12:13:29.095-08:00Dear Voxy,
I love your piece! I love the opening...Dear Voxy,<br /><br />I love your piece! I love the opening description, "A horrible crash. Car bits and glass everywhere. I’m on my way to a job interview, my first one in months and I cannot afford to blow it. I’m tired, I’m bitchy, I’m late." I love that you put us inside of the head of the narrator, and I love the whole FBI scene that she imagines. The ending paragraph is also really funny. Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-90566658708221204712010-11-27T12:10:24.222-08:002010-11-27T12:10:24.222-08:00Dear Pal,
I love your piece! I love the repetiti...Dear Pal,<br /><br />I love your piece! I love the repetition of the word, "twenty-nine" and all the things that 29 represents. I love this section, "Today, however, I arrive late to work as usual. I sneak out for coffee to cure my caffeine headache, which I pay for in quarters from my laundry money." It really shows the anxiety and economic desperation of the narrator. I also love that the number 29 is getting comfortable in the narrator's email box. Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-25304492688144481902010-11-27T10:24:20.769-08:002010-11-27T10:24:20.769-08:00Hi Abby,
I love this poem! It is so haunting and...Hi Abby,<br /><br />I love this poem! It is so haunting and sad. I love the repetition of the description of the store at the end of the earth. I love the description of the hobos, I love the line "that resumes are nothing but scraps of paper" and the undernourished brain. Beautiful!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-11681551176825518122010-11-27T10:15:50.648-08:002010-11-27T10:15:50.648-08:00Brian,
This is a very clever and sad piece! I lo...Brian,<br /><br />This is a very clever and sad piece! I love the repetition of "I have no email." I love the description of the narrator pasting resumes till he was blue in the wrist. <br /><br />I love the description of the two items that are in the email box--the invite from the old gym and the notifcation from Chase about the insufficient funds. Nice job!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-37867744352529284052010-11-12T15:55:54.614-08:002010-11-12T15:55:54.614-08:00louis -
You've created a very vivid place in...louis - <br /><br />You've created a very vivid place in this story. The narrators conflict with the real world is fantastic. I love the hope as the narrator listens to the real estate agent who sells them the home and the list of all the negative things she didn't tell him.<br />I love the picture painted in the last paragraph "ornamented in several languages...decorated in picture of domestic violence..."<br /><br />Thank you for posting!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-754632864748842002010-11-12T15:50:44.033-08:002010-11-12T15:50:44.033-08:00Hips like Cinderella -
I love this family story....Hips like Cinderella - <br /><br />I love this family story. The grandma comparing the poverty now to her poverty. Love the entire paragraph about the stars, the rant and the paragraph about the family choosing to send the sister to college "A wise investment for people who no longer had any real investments." Really great details with the stars and the astronomy lesson.<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-75908799721000466512010-11-12T15:43:46.328-08:002010-11-12T15:43:46.328-08:00Alix Sharkey - A vivid image of the once affluent ...Alix Sharkey - A vivid image of the once affluent neighborhood gone to the dogs! <br /><br />Love "The Art Deco district ain't what it was...mortages ripe for the plucking" & "fighting dogs with wrist-breaking jaws and tiny eyes." Scary!! <br /><br />Thanks for the great story!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-10972174509198717382010-11-12T14:25:28.233-08:002010-11-12T14:25:28.233-08:00Barry Jude - I really loved the lost feeling of th...Barry Jude - I really loved the lost feeling of the narrator. Just a couple of my favorite lines include: "I wish I could drink a beer and celebrate like Bukowski, but I need to save my change for the bus"<br /><br />and "When my characters complain, I tend to hit them even harder.<br /><br />Great work XoXo<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-28392247018223804582010-11-12T14:07:53.450-08:002010-11-12T14:07:53.450-08:00LTP (on 10/13)
Thanks for a great shopping story!...LTP (on 10/13)<br /><br />Thanks for a great shopping story!<br /><br />I love the part with the women oohing and aahing "Status emerge based on who found the prettiest feather, the biggest shell or the shiniest rock"<br /><br />Love the realization "fifty percent off made your ancient brain remember, scarcity"<br /><br />Thanks for a great shopping story.<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-54860935611246113322010-11-12T14:02:38.557-08:002010-11-12T14:02:38.557-08:00Kate W (from Oct. 12) What a great image of the mo...Kate W (from Oct. 12) What a great image of the monster. <br />Love his "thick leathery legs behind its slow-swinging head" and i love the "shodow moves along over us, between the buildings where we leave our guitars and our pens" and "remember a debt that's repaid without money."<br />What a great reminder!Writing Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-8627721055798662912010-11-12T13:57:57.306-08:002010-11-12T13:57:57.306-08:00Laurenne - I love that the narrator is breaking up...Laurenne - I love that the narrator is breaking up with money! Very funny and great twist. <br /><br />I love the opening line and the line of "Sweet arrogance when you ivite you friends to my bank account" Great stuff!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5444599588527265649.post-64050934470921994122010-11-10T10:23:05.287-08:002010-11-10T10:23:05.287-08:00Jade @ Tasting Grace -
Love how you captured this...Jade @ Tasting Grace -<br /><br />Love how you captured this moment in time and this man's thoughts. I love the through line of the whiskey, and how the labels went with his status from blue to black to the wonderful closing line "Better switch to Red." Love the description of the taste of the whiskey "savored the burn, lingering over the dark pepper kerosene trip." I could taste it!<br /><br />Thank you for commenting!<br /><br />MarilynWriting Padhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08457445478510415827noreply@blogger.com